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JohnnyboySP Sea Monkey Drone
Posts : 1956 Join date : 2010-03-02 Age : 34 Location : Northern Oklahoma
| Subject: Wisdom (A Poem) Sat Mar 06, 2010 10:26 pm | |
| Wisdom When I asked for wisdom, I did not know. That my life would change, like rain to snow. Now that wisdom, I do not lack. I greatly wish, To give it back. Wisdom burdens body and mind. I think of how I spend all my time. Each choice I make carries a toll. That is taken upon my very soul. It is too late, no turning back. Wisdom I will not ever lack. Once a fool, but no longer. I will continue to grow ever stronger. I know the one from whom this came. My life is not some silly game. The choices I make every single day will mold and shape me as potters shape clay. What is wisdom? To know brings pain. I have changed, like snow to rain. |
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Cajun Canine Admin
Posts : 1101 Join date : 2010-01-13 Age : 32 Location : Georgia, USA
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Sun Mar 07, 2010 1:30 am | |
| Read it just now, great poem. =D How long'd it take? |
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JohnnyboySP Sea Monkey Drone
Posts : 1956 Join date : 2010-03-02 Age : 34 Location : Northern Oklahoma
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Sun Mar 07, 2010 1:31 am | |
| An hour tops. I think. It's been like a year since I wrote it. |
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Cajun Canine Admin
Posts : 1101 Join date : 2010-01-13 Age : 32 Location : Georgia, USA
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Sun Mar 07, 2010 1:31 am | |
| A YEAR? Was this for an English class or for fun? Tis nice. =) |
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JohnnyboySP Sea Monkey Drone
Posts : 1956 Join date : 2010-03-02 Age : 34 Location : Northern Oklahoma
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Sun Mar 07, 2010 1:32 am | |
| For fun, well more a way of expressing some feelings I was having at the time lol And thanks =) |
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Mega10 Admin
Posts : 6953 Join date : 2010-01-13 Age : 132
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Fri Apr 09, 2010 2:28 am | |
| SKILL. I am HORRID at poetry =C HORRID. It took me six hours to get four stupid lines >_> I am not kidding. And the other time I had to make some nonsense story through poetry so I told a story about saving a pickle =\ XDD But yeah that's really good =. IMO And expresses the point. |
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JohnnyboySP Sea Monkey Drone
Posts : 1956 Join date : 2010-03-02 Age : 34 Location : Northern Oklahoma
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Fri Apr 09, 2010 10:09 am | |
| Thanks Mega! It's a simple poem though. There are far more complicated types. I did have a bit of help editing it too. (changed like 2 words ) |
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Mega10 Admin
Posts : 6953 Join date : 2010-01-13 Age : 132
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Fri Apr 09, 2010 2:25 pm | |
| XDD well its still imperssive to me. |
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JohnnyboySP Sea Monkey Drone
Posts : 1956 Join date : 2010-03-02 Age : 34 Location : Northern Oklahoma
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Wed Apr 14, 2010 1:33 am | |
| Well I guess I'm doing something right then XD |
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Mega10 Admin
Posts : 6953 Join date : 2010-01-13 Age : 132
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Wed Apr 21, 2010 3:13 am | |
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JohnnyboySP Sea Monkey Drone
Posts : 1956 Join date : 2010-03-02 Age : 34 Location : Northern Oklahoma
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Mon Oct 03, 2011 9:51 pm | |
| Bumping in case the newcomers want to see this for some reason. |
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Meowth'spal21 Bacon Bandit
Posts : 218 Join date : 2011-09-12
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Mon Oct 03, 2011 11:31 pm | |
| Aw. This was nice, JB. =) Poetry can be pretty complicated to write. It's not just about making something rhyme or experimenting with various styles, it's about making what you write not only make some kind of sense, but have some kind of theme, and even better, invoke some kind of feeling and/or emotion. (though, idk, this probably depends on the subject, and how deep you really wish to take your thoughts.) Now I'm no expert, so I could be talking out of my hat for all I know; but honestly, imo, it's good. You should give poetry another shot, sometime. It seems to be a dying art. I've done some myself, but it's been an awfully long time. |
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JohnnyboySP Sea Monkey Drone
Posts : 1956 Join date : 2010-03-02 Age : 34 Location : Northern Oklahoma
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Tue Oct 04, 2011 3:10 am | |
| I used to have a passion for wanting to write, and unfortunately for whatever reason it's not something the Lord has fueled lately. If He ever does inspire me to try again I'd be happy to. Thanks for the comment and thanks for reading. |
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Ryu Chicken Byproduct Lovers
Posts : 319 Join date : 2010-05-12 Age : 33 Location : Nearby
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Thu Oct 06, 2011 11:41 am | |
| I've lost a few brain cells by reading this, is that wisdom? D: |
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JohnnyboySP Sea Monkey Drone
Posts : 1956 Join date : 2010-03-02 Age : 34 Location : Northern Oklahoma
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Thu Oct 06, 2011 11:43 am | |
| Maybe once you get them back. |
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Ryu Chicken Byproduct Lovers
Posts : 319 Join date : 2010-05-12 Age : 33 Location : Nearby
| Subject: Re: Wisdom (A Poem) Thu Oct 06, 2011 11:47 am | |
| They might have been gone in China with all the rest of the stuff we lose. I should tell Pudding to put a fancy smiley somewhere. |
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